For all teenagers. What do you think of my writing?

Dude is ther e apoint to this story? This is like some skeleton you pulled out of the closet, create some muscle for it and all the other important parts and then ask again. Why does it have to be so depresing? Where does she live? When does it take place? Remeber these key elements, you have to have a plot, internal and external conflict, rising action the climax- there could be several climaxs btw- and falling action that leads to a resolution. If you want to add a plot twist or a few and then some other intesting details, like is it a horror flick? a comedy? Drama? action what? If you want some help go ahead and email me.